Revising: by Prof Souryana Yassine transcript

and again this is Professor Serena Yasin from the University of zoo to carry on with the mooc of academic writing we are within week three seconds one evaluating and revising in academic writing today we are going to deal with pasture which is a revision as an introduction you can say that revision is often defined as the last stage in the writing process which includes rewriting writing and revision Donald Murray in 1982 argues that writing is rewriting writing you need to first read then reread review reflect and revise all of these steps are very important is revision revision can be defined as a sequence of changes in a composition changes which are initiated by cues and occur continually throughout the writing of a week Summer's 1980 page 380. it can also be defined as a process of making changes throughout the writing of draft changes that work to make the draft congruent with the writers changing intentions this is what summer says in 1982 and then we can look at it as a non-given recursive problem solving process as brokawi points out in 2007. revision as a writing stage when we look at the stages of academic writing we see that the first stage is pre-writing then we have research then we have drafted and then comes revising before that the final stage which is editing and proof reading revision versus proof reading it's important to make a distinction between the two because often people confuse between them so includes read what you have written again we arrange words sentences or paragraphs into a clear and logical order take out or add parts do more research if you think you should replace overused or underused words or sorry unclear words read your writing aloud to be sure it flows smoothly add transitions why proofreading has to do with the fact of be sure all sentences are complete correct spelling capitalization and punctuation to change words that are not used correctly or are unclear make sure you are using the appropriate style formatting that is the APA format in Chicago style format in MLA formatting or have someone else check your wig so you have the reference for this distinction today we are going to look at revision steps a revision in academic writing is a process that involves all the aspects of the piece of writing the main steps of revision include first content revision structure revision and language revision but revising content content revision means making sure that all the information included in your paper is accurate complete and comprehensible some strategies for revising content are a correct any inaccurate quantitative data or other information add further information explanations of Concepts and processes C delete any information that is unassociation and unimportant and declarified Technical terms between brackets what we mean by Concepts then we have revising structure a revised in text structure involves teaching your text structure on different levels make sure that a there are topic sentences in all paragraphs B each section has an overall structure see previous section about different types of academic writing and see the text in fact does what it sets out to do demonstrates describe analyze report Etc note text structure depends on text type depending on discipline there are different Traditions conventions and demands on text structure and text types science texts Humanities text territory criticism and Etc three revising language revising language involves three main language levels a vocabulary B spinning and C grammar vocabulary choose the right terms and avoid worthiness sentence sentences that begin with there is or there are let's talk uh some examples there are two major experiments that the biology Department sponsors uh this sentence could be revised as the biology Department sponsors two major experiments and we have also substances with unnecessary modifiers the first sentence is worthy two exemplary famous and well-known consumer Advocates spoke eloquently in favor of the proposed important legislation we can revise these sentence as to when non-consumer Advocates spoke in favor of the proposed legislation and then you have the reference second I think that we need to look at is vocabulary consistency when using words be careful to be consistent of using a specific spelling either British or American and here you have a tablet which gives you some examples of words and the way they are spelled both using the British English and the American English when writing make sure you are consistent in your choices studying speed ing bullish spelling is very irregular you need to use traditional or online dictionaries to avoid the spelling mistakes in your papers examples if you have an incorrect use this announcement is given to have a significant effect on everyone's Outlook indeed the word affect is not the appropriate one it is means spelled correct this announcement is going to have a significant effect on everyone's how to look respect the rules and check for appropriate structures let's take some examples first adjective form error and we have an incorrect form on Research one I heard the news I was very anger the correct form is when I heard the news I was very angry so the rule use the adjective form not the noun form in this context a second example has to do with articles and encountable noun mistakes we have an incorrect structure I have a brown skin correct I have brown skin the rule says don't use an article with Incredible nouns like skin an example of a paragraph revision is provided to you following this link and using the grammarly uh site so here we have the original draft paragraph Take few moments to read this paragraph and to look at all the inconsistencies it contains after that we are going to look at the way it has been revised so the revised paragraph goes this way you have some aspects which are highlighted looking at the different parts of the revision which took place within this paragraph and then we have some explanations in this explain we find that the original topic centers did not accurately reflect what the paragraph was about it suggested that the paragraph will be a comparison between Cheerios and Frosted Flakes but only discussed the benefits of Cheerios without mentioning the Frosted Flakes at all second the original phrasing was too long and easily replaced with something shorter foreign matches the same construction as the other items in the series four words like really or very are often unnecessary five the entire sentence is unnecessary 6 the original sentence copied the same structure as the one before it so we changed that structure seven we revived this sentence to remove the passive voice ate the word delicious appeared a few sentences before this my this sentence seemed out of order so we moved it earlier then the usage of your was grammatically incorrect so when you look at these explanations you go back to the original paragraph and to the revised paragraph in order to really see how revision works as a concluded note it is relevant to remember that successful writing goes through stages such as a revision getting the content and the structure right editing making each sentence follow and choosing the right words proofreading checking out Grana and spelling and punctuation you can use Sun software to revise edit and proofread your paper here you have a list of references which is going to help you know more about the revision process in writing academic pieces of writing and then thank you very much for your attention